The Archives : A Rewrite!

11 thoughts on “The Archives : A Rewrite!”

  1. Great story with a fun twist, in both forms. I love to see what people cut when editing, very interesting. I would have cut out the description of Gabriela except for the curling lip, and let have the Englishness of the guy in, because that gives him character and I liked it. But if I hadn’t read the first version earlier, I wouldn’t have missed anything.

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