The 1955 Platform Incident : FFfAW

This is my entry in this weeks Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (FFfAW)

Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers 1_9

© The Storytellers Abode

The 1955 Platform Incident

I’d love to tell you the full story of the 1955 platform incident, but I can’t.

I was only around four years old, and can only really recollect what I’ve been told. What remains are imagined emotions and a vague malaise.

Imagine the billowing steam of the approaching monster, as the train approached, and then conjure up the look of terror on my face, as the platform rumbled and the train drew nearer.

Picture again, as I searched desperately for a hand to hold or the warm comfort of my mother’s embrace.

See in your mind’s eye, as the powerful express train hurtled through the station, with deafening noise and swirling smoke.

The photo was taken just after the train had disappeared.

What a great Facebook moment it would have made, don’t you think?

Graham on the Chippenham, Wiltshire Station Platform, Circa 1955

Graham on Chippenham Station Platform, Circa 1955

30 thoughts on “The 1955 Platform Incident : FFfAW

  1. Great childhood memories and I love your photo. 🙂 I can understand the fear – I still feel it when they rush past at full speed. My nephew, despite being fascinated by trains from a young age, watched them with his hands over his ears for a very long time! A nicely described piece, Graham.

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  2. You were an adorable little boy! I can imagine how frightening the sounds, smells, and smoke was to you at 4 years old! I didn’t grow up around trains. Excellent story Graham and well done how you pulled the reader into the fear you were feeling. Thank you for participating in FFfAW challenge!

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  3. A really nice take on the prompt, Graham. It’s good to have a true-life story for a change. The photo of you is so sweet. I like the way you depict the fear inside the small child/yourself as the great ‘monster’ hurtled through the station. Steam trains in particular often seem terrifying to a small child… so much noise and billowing steam and smoke. You describe it very well.(Hope you don’t mind me saying, but you need an apostrophe in mind’s eye.The eye belongs to, or is in, the mind, in this description. A small detail, which you’ve probably just overlooked.)

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      • Hi, Graham. I like to comment on mistakes – and hope people will do the same for me (because I make a lot of typos!) but not everyone accepts them graciously. It’s difficult to know whether people will see such comments as an insult. One person did just that when I pointed something out, so I’ve been a bit hesitant since. Your story was an endearing one, anyway.

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      • Yes I agree. Praise is nice but critiques enable us to grow and develop. I will always accept constructive comments as graciously as they have been offered (big grin)

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      • Then if I find any, I’ll (graciously) let you know. 🙂 Louise, my daughter, is happy to help people, too. She does more of the challenges than I do (because I need to write my book!) so she’s always around to offer advice, if needed. I tend to just do this one now. Thank you for your very gracious reply.

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      • Great! I look forward to that. Good luck on your book. I’ll seek out Louise and make sure she’s on my follow list. My blog has grown so speedily, I have problems sometimes in keeping up!

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      • Lou is on your follow list. Her blog is thestorytellersabode. This was her prompt. That’s how come the woman on the platform is also my daughter, Nicola (who is, sadly, blogless!) 😀

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      • Nic has one son – Kieran, the train fanatic. But she lectures at Lincoln Uni, and is very ambitious. She already has her doctorate, and won’t be happy until we have to bow down and call her ‘Professor’! She’s an archaeologist – and decidedly blogless.

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      • I’m glad I understand the connection! I downloaded one of Lou’s drawings that my wife Anne-Claude has added to her colouring projects …

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  4. Such a wonderful description of what took place and the feelings involved. The look even speaks volumes. I can imagine just how big and loud that train sounded to someone so little! I can also understand how that memory will never be lost.

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